Bob's comments on hw3 scripts

afabrizi -

Line: Yeah Timothy, I you never know you might meet somebody. => Yeah Timothy, you never know. You might meet someone.

I think that the zombie should have a real sexy female voice. Not the zombie voice. She could talk to him and everything. It is part of the allure that he sees in her. Maybe even you only hear the voice when he is listening by himself, but otherwise you hear the zombie voice.

Technically you can pull this off. I also recommend that you see if there is some way of using a real female for the zombie. I doubt it, but worth looking into. Also, get some clothes for the zombie that isn't just regular. You could use Barney for Timothy since he is in uniform and put some kind of badge or security guard thing on him.

baca -

Lots of textures needed to indicate the sections and even the box that he picks up. One of the teams last year had a nice grocery store that you maybe could borrow. It was Mike Taylor's team. I'm not sure if we can find it, but it might be worth finding. Some interesting technical details (seeing the thing blowing up on the TV screen is doable. Will need to cut in inserts probably of the list. It would be nice if the Robber looked like a robber, and not some random character. Not sure what textures you can do on this, but it needs to be clear, not just a guy holding a gun. Mask would be good, but hard. Definitely some interesting techincal challenges.

bbartlet -

This is really funny. Very difficult challenges to get the characters. Plus you are going to need good voice actors. Someone who sounds like Sean Connery will really make it better. I don't know if you can actually do this much stuff. If you are only a team of two? For Harry you could use Kleiner and change his clothes to be black maybe. Jesus? That is going to be really hard. White robes, beard?? Sean Connery. Not sure which character to pick, but again need some texturing help. It is pretty funny stuff though.

brinkerh -

It feels too long. I think that you need to trim the dialog and tighten it up. Maybe the long speeches by the man can be cut down. The ending needs work. It just isn't very interesting. Here are some ideas: the guard is walking home and sees the guy (after he thinks that he is a spy) sitting on the side walk. Guy looks up and winks. Guard, smiles and walks on. Maybe a twist at the end - the guys are talking and some other bad guys come up and shoot the spy or there is a gun battle or something. Or maybe guys in white suits haul him a way. You build all this up and then blah. We need to talk about this in class. Not much in technical challenge except you need to get the clothes right.

casey -

Give G-Man some good clothes for the wedding.

Given that I am not a bit HL2 person, I don't get it. What does stiches have to do with anything. The ending needs work in my opinion. Nice leadin, but then blah. The sets seem ok and nothing technically too hard (making them kiss is very difficult). Need a party place, kitchen, wedding chapel, outside. So, it will take some doing.

desmond -

As soon as I hear -> I heard ... Bulldozer? Is there a model that you can take or use (GMOD?).

So if you would just like to take it as read that he's actually here -> Needs to be rewritten, doesn't make sense.

Hum. It seems too long for one. And the ending is a little blah. I get it, but ... I'm not sure about this idea. I think that we need to discuss further.

jholbroo -

Ok, I do not get it at all. I get up to the end, but there is something that is in this context that you all understand and I don't. I think that it needs a lot more punch. The only technical challenge is going to be using a computer and lots of screen shots and whatever inserted. Can be done, but will be a bit tricky. Some good editing will get it. Anyway, we need to discuss this as the script just doesn't explain to me what is going on.

jhorn -

Dancing is a bit tricky, but not too bad. I think that I'd put in BYU insignia all over the place. Just to rib BYU some more. LOL. Not as ambitious as the others and you have a team of 4 people. Feels like not enough work.

jmeier -

Wow. This is incredible. Can you pull it off? I think so. The only trick is going to be the analogy part. How do you do that.

tatarevi -

Nice. Succinct and it works. It is going to be difficult technically to pull off. The gps and all that stuff. Unless you use some kind of inserts, maybe a quick video that is not machinima, just screen shots? I like the concept though.

zhang -

Ok in concept. But I don't see how to get a model of Bush. Unless youc an get it out of Garry's mod. I suppose that you might be able to use Magnusson, if you work on his head. Mark can maybe help you. I also don't know if you can get a shoe model. Maybe you can build one. Making it hit him could be done I guess with a tracktrain. Still some tough technical stuff.I'd like to hear what the others say if this piece really works.