Comments from Bob

All – how are you going to build the various parts of your story. You need to make sure that you have good mappings into the limited machinima world.

Economy – Ending is weak. Ironic metaphors expert team. Everything is set up great, but then…. Green monster, Keanu Reeves, Squirrel? All sound hard. Think of something that will be easy to do in Machinima, but funny, painful.

Rising Stasis – way too much script to do. You are going to have to cut it back. Building new town might be difficult.

Christian Bale – It feels too long. It is really funny, but it feels too long. Same gag over and over again will get boring.

Mario – How are you going to do this? Use a human in Mario clothes? When you get into 2D world, how are you doing this? It feels really short, but may not actually be because there are lots of shots (bouncing on humans).

Zombie – script and what you can actually do are very far apart. But you can use it as a guideline and do the best that you can. Do you plan to insert shots of actually playing the game or how are you doing that? It may be too long, although not a ton of sets. Lots of stuff is not going to be able to be done (jogging soccer moms, maybe)?